DarthUbera

Love it, the action, the fear, its clever. Really grabs you into the story, I'm excited for the next Chapter. A child's grasp of understanding magic is rather interesting, I ...

Hahahahaha. Now that that is out of the way well done. An interesting commentary on not just Humanity as a whole but how we perceive aliens. Id love to see ...

I see no reason why this doesnt work more as an extention to Chapter 1. It seems to me to work as an extention. To me, and this is specifically ...

I thought it was rather amazing skill with writing. I would say I would expand how long you want Chapter 1 to be. It does draw you into the world ...

I liked the mystery. I would say you focus a lot on details that maybe don't need to be focused on. Saying 'Medium Height of 5'5' was just repeating the ...

Interesting, if I were u I'd go into Mateo's thoughts a little more. But thats just me. Definetly some great strong ideas here you care for your characters and that ...