DarkTestimonyofTruth

Hey, I'm kind of a sucky critique, but I'll give it a go! So I enjoyed it, it was funny and a good read. I personally thought the dialogue was ...

He paces his quarters, One hand on his belt. The other, beside him, Gloved in fine lion's pelt. The firelight warms him, Though not to the core. He sobs with ...

When I was born I was torn And thus taken away. Alone in a kennel Being gentle Every single day. Getting sick Not even giving a lick Not even going ...

"That fright was indeed here" Rhythm is off on this one. I think that you should find a synonym for 'indeed' that is only one syllable. "And my eyes twinkled, ...

I know what it's like, to be a teenager, my love. [I don't know why, but 'my love' doesn't seem to fit for me.] I've been there too; I'm not ...

Clockworks- I liked it. But I must say, it didn't seem to have any sort of rhythm or rhyme that I could locate. It seemed to me the only things ...

Night Masquerade- I'm already your friend, but I'll try not to be bias. On your poem- I did quite enjoy it. I do agree that the ending could use a ...