Dahlia

Hey, you really need to break this story up into smaller paragraphs! It will make your reviewers happier and more willing to read. :) EDIT: I just realized you were ...

Hey, there! Dahlia here to critique. Black and White lived in a small village called Shades. Black and White never got along. They were always being paired together, and called ...

Hello, Dahlia here. Your title drew me in! From the height I am in I can see into your window. I watch you sleep restlessly by his side. I think ...

Hola, senorita, you've got one fancy title here! :wink: Rosalyn sat in class anxiously waiting for the bell to ring. It was her last class of the day; she was ...

Hello! I was looking for something to review and your title caught my eye. 8) [s]For[/s] The cold air holds no secrets , Jade. You should know that by now. ...

Joana Banana Fo Fana was shopping for muffins at the grocery store the other day. I waved hi and she waved back, but I noticed something strange, her butt cheeks ...

Hello! It's Dahlia, remember me from the chat? I saw her again. She spent her day at the same room. This time, she sat on the wooden floor, her back ...

Howdy! Dahlia here to review! That morning I was more nervous then I ever had been in my whole life. I hadn't seen my family in the longest time. They ...

Hey, Mars! I'm going to try to be as harsh/constructive as possible. :P "Ye of little faith," I reply, my voice steady. I am confident. I know I can take ...

Hola, I'm gonna review your piece! 8) The Purple Paperclip There once was a purple paperclip Despite it’s location, it was quite pleased To the other utensils The Paper and ...

Howdy! I'm Dahlia and I'm here to review your piece. :P "Adam. Adam, get up." I grumbled something and turned over. "Adam, today's our birthday. Don't you remember?" My twin ...

Hey, there, I'm going to do my first non-fiction review! I'm going to remain as neutral as possible and not critique you on your political views. might be easy to ...

In the future of our universe, man had discovered another planet that was able to support human life. Intergalactic travel had become very poplar between the two main earths and ...

Hey! I really liked the beginning of this, so I'll review this one, too. The other girls chewed gum in front of the bathroom mirrors and the morning, and she ...

Hey there! I'm here to review your story. :D Chapter 1 "Ew! What the hell is wrong with you?! Seriously, that is just sick! Gross!" I grimaced and stared at ...