Published March 7, 2009
Joana Banana Fo Fana was shopping for muffins at the grocery store the other day.
I waved hi and she waved back, but I noticed something strange, her butt cheeks
were rumbling, I'm very positive she wasn't going to fart.
They starting moving in weird ways. She didn't seem like she noticed,
or cared much. Me, still staring, her buttocks engulfed of box of muffins!
M-U-F-F-I-N-S! and Joana did not notice. I had my eye balls poppin out
of my head. She just stood there holding Banana's debating which ones
where better to buy, while her *cheeks* are going to town sucking in
more and more muffins, Blueberry, Chocolate, Banana nut, Raisin, cinnamon
(I'm making you hungry aren't I?) and also Grape, one by one! and I'm the
only one noticing it all! Her butt cheeks stop. She comes over to me and
says, "Could you help me find where the muffins are at?"
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Hmm well this one was certainly an interesting piece here. I'm not entirely sure what exactly its trying to accomplish. It seems like maybe it could be a story but there's also something of a fairly tale ish vibe and although it doesn't quite have the right content for it it vaguely reminds me of a nursery rhyme. At any rate you if this was fully meant to be a story you might have to change up some of the slightly sing song nature of it.
Now moving past that little bit of confusion that we have on that, this makes for an interesting read. It seems like we've got some sort of potential mischievous or maybe even malicious in some form magic doing its thing there and as a result this poor human has no idea what is going on at all. It looks like no one actually knows the cause either which would add a nice bit of mystery if the whole thing didn't come across as a little too comedic to be taken too seriously. At any rate I do have to then wander what exactly the purpose here was in terms of a plot that you wanted to bring across? Because I'm not quite seeing anything at the moment.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Ha ha ha. nice going with the name. Johanna Banana Fo Fanna. Nice...
Im geussing that this is suppose to be sort of a poem, type short story kinda thing? ...yeah...? no...?
or is it a folktale explaining why muffins just always go to my dang thighs?
Either way, it did make me laugh, and yes, you did make me hungry.
KEEP WRITING
-Crazysocklover117
Haha thanx 4 the comment.
Okay, I'm honestly not quite sure what this is. It seems more like a song...? I really don't know what to say other than this is rather interesting. I hope I helped!
---Dahlia