Crysi

All right! So, I've read over your original prologue, and I think you've done a good job with revising it. I see you've also extended it a bit, which is ...

Hey WNS! I'm gonna try to get all these critiques out today, and while I generally don't do poetry, I'll give you what guidance I can here. :) Schorching fire ...

1. Double-space between your paragraphs so it's not so clumped together. 2. Double-check your spelling and punctuation. 3. This sounds more like a journal entry than a story. In fact, ...

All right, my young Padawan, a promise is a promise, however late. One critique, coming up! (Note that I haven't read the other critiques yet... I'd rather post my own ...

Hey Lil Dono! :) I'm finally getting around to reviewing everything I promised I would, though I admit I'm going a bit out of order by reviewing yours first. I've ...

Beautiful, my love. Just like that box, this poem is full of emotion, and I can feel it so completely! (And not just because of the obvious...) I love the ...

Oh Pingu... This is beautiful! Sometimes it helps to remember that last line when we go through stuff like this, you know? Helped me out, at least. Anyway, my one ...

1. Spellcheck is your friend. 2. Capitalization is your friend. 3. Punctuation is your friend. I'd like to see more effort put into this. I'll give you a quickly edited ...

Cute! :D It did indeed make me giggle. Very creative. And I didn't notice this until after I read it, but the title is equally as amusing. Suggestions on the ...

Hey there, While we do ask that you double-space between paragraphs in prose (and between stanzas in poetry, obviously), it's not necessary between every line. In fact, it's somewhat detrimental, ...

So... every once in a while I'll click on an interesting title on the "Recent Additions" list, just to check it out. I may read all of it, I may ...

You know, I like this. I like both patterns you have going on -- the one-to-one and the ___ me (or so I've named them). And then you bring it ...

This sucks! Hah, no, just kidding. I think this is pretty funny. After all, whatever I say can be critiqued by the poem, no? Anyway. Not sure the first stanza ...

Oh man, I hate those angles of darkness. Such a pain to work with -- sin and cos never come out right, and forget integrating the shape. (I think I ...

Oh Brad... this is beautiful. Really encapsulates the entirety of missing someone -- how everywhere you look, every insignificant thing you do, is a reminder of some significant memory, some ...