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Re: Termination (Edited!)
Edit: made a number of changes to achieve greater clarity, as remember20 suggested- thankyou!
Jun 19, 2011 -
Re: Termination (Edited!)
Anyone?
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Kathryn
Thanks Redfang :) Any one else?
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: Swagger
I could imagine it making a good rap! Not sure if this is the right section for it, though... Also, without meaning to be rude, what's a weeble?
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Ducks
The last line really made me laugh out loud. I think it worked more because it broke from the rythm you'd built in the previous stanzas. A nice change!
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Classifieds
Thank you very much, Alex! It was originally 'you made your choIce' but I changed it to 'our' during a redraft because I felt it helped to communicate the fact ...
Jun 12, 2011 -
Re: Classifieds
Why? :) I'd like to mention that the last 3 lines are a direct quote from the advert that inspired this piece.
Jun 12, 2011
