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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Termination (Edited!)

    Edit: made a number of changes to achieve greater clarity, as remember20 suggested- thankyou! 

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Termination (Edited!)

    Anyone?

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Kathryn

    Thanks Redfang :) Any one else?

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Swagger

    I could imagine it making a good rap! Not sure if this is the right section for it, though... Also, without meaning to be rude, what's a weeble?

    Jun 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Ducks

    The last line really made me laugh out loud. I think it worked more because it broke from the rythm you'd built in the previous stanzas. A nice change!

    Jun 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Classifieds

    Thank you very much, Alex! It was originally 'you made your choIce' but I changed it to 'our' during a redraft because I felt it helped to communicate the fact ...

    Jun 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Classifieds

    Why? :) I'd like to mention that the last 3 lines are a direct quote from the advert that inspired this piece.

    Jun 12, 2011


Perhaps it is better to wake up after all, even to suffer, rather than to remain a dupe to illusions all one's life.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening