Crimsona

Thank you for your review Shubhi, it was really informative. (: I have been working my way through this chapter and it is almost fully 'de-longsentanceised'. I will certainly take ...

Redwall. Really dull...

Thanks again Yuri! I have been working on this chapter and will work again to make it as good as possible. Thanks so much for your critique. :D

Thanks for the thorough review Yuri! You picked up on some very valid points and I'm extremely grateful! :) *starts to edit*

I have to agree with the other two people who have reviewed, that the rhyming and rhythm is very forced. However, I thought that the emotion in this poem was ...

Thanks you two! I will take your critique into account and start working on building up more emotion. :)

Ah okay. :) xD Was it the one that Maroono wrote? (He's a good friend of mine and his main character is called Wind)

Thank you! :) I'll do that. Thanks again! :D

Thanks Kiwi! :) I totally get what you're saying about the random burning, Kirja thing. I should probably get rid of it. xD Wind? I don't think I've got a ...

Thanks Isha! :D What you said about dialogue made perfect sense and I never knew that before! (stupid English teachers) Thanks so much for your review! :D

xD F.R.E.D rocks! I can't find anything to critique on, it's just too uberific.... and that's not something I say every day! F.R.E.D must be very pleased that you wrote ...

Thanks Isha! :) I'll definitly take the run on sentences and paragraphs into account. :D Third chapter will be up... now? xD

Thanks CreativeFreak. :) I'll add in the punctuation/grammar that you suggested. ;)

Thanks so much CreativeFreak! :D

Hahahahaha! Love this! Great! :D I'm so glad.