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  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: A Veil of Clouds

    Hello, thatboy. I'm Freak. I really love this poem. It is so amazing. No joke. You have great imagery and I get a sense of calmness. Nitpicks, though :P : ...

    Nov 27, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: A Time, But No Place

    Hello. I really did like this... A lot! It was an interesting read and got me thinking, "Hm...what is the meaning of life?" Haha. I'm just kidding - about the ...

    Nov 15, 2010

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Endangered Seas (Scenes 1 + 2)

    Hello! :D I'm going to attempt to review a majority of this...Phew, wish me luck. :D *Note: Remember to put periods at the end of all you sentences. I will ...

    Nov 15, 2010

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: 6200 ch. 1

    Hi there. I'm sorry, but this looks very unpleasant to read. Try breaking it up and having a better hook to grasp the readers attention. That's all I can say ...

    Nov 15, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: The Best Friend

    Hello, MoMo. :) I'm Freak. This was...very interesting, caught my attention for sure. I liked it for the most part, but it seemed like it went by too fast - ...

    Nov 15, 2010

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Salvation

    Hi, Ligea! :) I'm Freak. I like this a lot. You have great imagery and I can almost feel the emotions! But, there are nitpicks: Over fields and hills he ...

    Nov 15, 2010

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: The Last Rose.

    Hi, BrokenSkye. I'm Freak. :) This poem was very captivating. I liked it. But, there are nitpicks: I left you a rose. It erased my smile. You continue your next ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: The dog that never left his owner

    Hi, CaptainRandom. I'm Freak. :) I really love this. It's so sweet and surreal. Absolutely adorable. Great job! This although seems like it should go in the Short Stories Forum... ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: What a state of mind

    Hi, Iamnotperfect. :) I'm Freak...Heehee. I love this poem and I can seriously relate to it, but every great piece needs editing! Nitpicks: *Make sure to capitalize the beginning of ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: The Blue Tree

    Hi, nekros. :) I'm Freak. I absolutely adore this poem. It makes sense and it is a pleasant story to visualize and, of course, read - like a movie. You ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: A Moment when all things stop (poem)

    Hi, Hayley10019. :) I'm Freak. I like this piece, it's relatable and cute. But every good piece needs a little editing. Nitpicks: A moment when all things stop is what ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Not Everything

    Hiyah, Persephoneia. :) You write more poetry than I do in a month...wow. Anyway! This poem was super good. I liked it and thought it was "Deep." * Shrugs* I ...

    Nov 14, 2010

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: To YWS (Happy Sixth Birthday)

    Hi, lilymoore, I'm Freak. :) I really like this - love it actually. I'm sure Nate will be greatful. Nice. Nitpicks: Young Writers Society (Comma) Oh what can I say? ...

    Nov 13, 2010

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: The forbidden love in my fantasy

    Hello, CaptainRandom! :) I'm Freak. This poem was too cute. :D But , it needs work. Nitpicks: It would seem wired Do you mean "Weird?" if we were together (Period) ...

    Nov 13, 2010

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: The Voice In My Head

    Woah! This is super long!...Oh, hi there. :D Ayee, Ranger Hawk, I'm Freak...I think we met, but otherwise, it's nice to meet you. :) I really love the first stanza. ...

    Nov 13, 2010


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