CraigFrank

My biological father basically told my mom Words such as 'basically' and 'like' make you sound less sure of yourself. You know when you're not sure you're right and you ...

I've finished the prologue-type section so I'll start with that. This section seemed kind of like the plot-outline. I have a friend on here who when he outlined the plot ...

I will do grammar stuff first. The cloud shut it's lips on Celina.She This should be 'The cloud shut its lips on Celina. She Additionally, like one of the reviews ...

Ok, first of all, I know I said flashbacks should be marked in some way but I meant more like: [title] [text of the flashback] "***" The way it is ...

I like the idea of James thinking Raye's disappearance was a game. I think you could reveal this no longer being the case a bit better though. So instead of ...

I decided to rather than do nit-picks do this paragraph by paragraph, then link it all together at the end, like the pro that I am. Paragraph 1: I feel ...

my eyes burn Should be a capital 'M', as this is the start of a run-on. A run-on is when two sentences that are gramatically correct on their own are ...

u kiss me Look, I don't know if you're going for something here but if you're going to talk in text speak you have to keep it consistent all the ...

Hey there, I stumble on my skirt At first I thought she was like, stumbling into her skirt. Maybe you could say 'on the edge of my skirt'. Four times ...

At a time where genetics is more advanced, and there's a uncrossable gap between the rich and the poor. I'm going to do some quick nitpicks on this sentence first. ...