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Re: Web of Deceit : a Sherlock Holmes Story {Prologue}
Hello! Oh my gosh this is so cool, as a BBC fan, I was so ready to click this and read pages upon pages. Just a few notes really because ...
Jun 27, 2017 -
Re: Gall - Prologue
Whoa! This is so cool! It sounds really interesting and I'm excited to read more. Just a few notes before I go. Your dialogue is kind of hard to pick ...
Jun 27, 2017 -
Re: Chapter One
Hey PeculiarMind, This first chapter sounds really good just a few notes. 1. It seems a little fast paced, not a whole lot of description here. 2. Introduce your main ...
Jun 26, 2017 -
Re: Last Cry
Beautiful! I love the imagery you have going on here and the wonderful adjectives! Very somber and very creative. It'd be cool if you put something like this into story ...
Jun 26, 2017 -
Re: Moonlight: Chapter One
This was pretty good. It seemed a little fast paced for a first chapter, and I got confused on whether or not she's a princess. The introduction to your characters ...
Jun 26, 2017