ConorR

very good nice use of metaphors cant think of anything else so keep up the good work your friend Conor

nice poem te but the only problem is that the vampire is now too much like a streotype he has no life he has no felling that sort of thing ...

nice this is my sort of poem reminds me of sometihng thati just cant put my finger on Tad bit odd but i liked keep up the good work Conor

i really like this poem it is very intersting and there is a good choice of words this poem has its own voice so it stands out Conor

Very good, bit confused with some of your choises of wording but really very good

good writing (besides grammar lol) very good idea lol pac man

BORING not my kind of story *JOKE* it is cioolieo i like it much. YOUR local madman JABBA THE HUTT! Laters P>S i like points so please donate me some ...

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yes i agree i didnt 100% understand all of it but still...>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> it's a very nice story!

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havent had time to edit!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! meow

i was trying 2 be serious but i couldnt think of anything.

Bravo very good keep up the good work and try 2 write a poem, check through it for grammar your best friend Conor Cant wait to read your next poem!

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good poem it is rather long from your sort of friend CONORR