ConfusingSillyLittleGirl

This is really good to me! It sounds like a prayer, which makes that which you say fit with it even more! But the second stanza's rythm seemed very different ...

That's a sad poem. The simplicity of the poem gives it it's own kind of feel, maybe you should try and add more reasons or emotions because it starts and ...

Very good, yes it does sound like a song! I really liked it, I also liked the metaphores you used, it makes it all more interesting and pulls you in ...

I liked it, but I do think that the rythm and rhyme didn't work so well in the mid section, but i do like the style in which you write ...

Wow, it will make such a good story! I can just imagene it, the way you write makes the images clear, although I was confused at a few places. . ...

I like the idea, and it feels like I can realte to the poem, although I do think that with this type of theme and what you are trying to ...