Clo

Hey wiseman, here I am again =) “This is “Rose, Madeline, and I’m Sarah” said Sarah “you won’t have to worry about the hunter, we took care of him.” Most ...

Hey Jiggity! She could see roots, bugs, birds and things. It all reads so prettily, and then things comes up. Things always looks bad in writing - perhaps find a ...

Hola! Rhea was nearly begging, something she had grown into disliking more than anything in the world. This line was rather confusing. Something Rhea dislikes? Or Hannah? I had to ...

Hey Gryphon! He was perfect in every way, except for one thing... He was already dead... Ellipses never look very nice in writing. This is a kick-butt intro, but if ...

Welcome to YWS! Remember to review. Like Sam described. *points to prior post* I was scared to even touch you, scared I'd break you! I'm not really a big fan ...

Heya, Crouched down, leaning [s]down[/s] on his haunches with his legs akimbo Unless the repetition is intentional. And akimbo, awesome word! His hands fervently rub each other, as if he ...

Hey Sam! Holy canoli, starting off with Of Montreal! And Gronlandic Edit. You are one cool dudette with an impeccable taste in music. ;) It's actually genetically impossible for a ...

Hey Kylan! You've had some excellent, thorough reviews already. Let's see how I can help... Firstly, I commend the title. It's what drew me in. I love it. He had ...

Hey Curly! I just noticed that you're running out of points. You need to get reviewing, or you won't be able to post any more stories for a while. :( ...

Heya! Here comes Clo. Ever since the first ray of light that reflected off the water from the pond in which I was conceived. I'm not really keen on this ...

Hey Angel! Rinoa is in your avatar!!! *dances* =D He knew what he wanted tonight, his new club had just been named the number one club in Chicago and he ...

Hey Curly! Here I ammmmmm. Since everybody else took care of the grammar, I'll just say this one thing about: I know you're trying to fix up your grammar, and ...

Hey Firearris! One review, coming right up! =) Grammar & Style Crusade: “ Mother ? May I go out?” I asked. Her reply was just a nod. I walked out ...

Hey Chernobyl! Lovely intro, to begin with. He didn’t like questions he couldn’t answer and he refused to admit that he was far from unique in that respect. Terror was ...

Hey Curly! ^_^ I didn't mention this the first time, so I have to now: I think you've got a great title for this story. It's very clever. Anywho... She ...