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Ah! Sorry it took me so long to critique this. I really kept glancing over it in my inbox - how embarrassing! I'm on it right now though. :wink: We...mind. ...

Hey Maki! *flies in on rope* Here I am to saaave the daaay! She stood there, frozen- Her long twig legs shaking. You don't follow a dash with another capitalized ...

Hm. I've read a lot, but now I find it hard in remembering the titles... I really enjoyed the Birth of Venus by Sarah Dunant, but that's not YA. How ...

Hey Dragon! Welcome to YWS! *hugs* First off, I have a small suggestion. Try not to use polls in your stories - if someone likes or dislikes it, they will ...

Hey Conrad! The costumes of the other party-goers, both human and enchanted alike, swirled about in an assorted collage of strangeness as they danced, drank, and mingled with one another; ...

Hey Bickazer! Here goes my second review for you. =D What the hell does that word even mean anymore? I mean, I swear “I love you” is the most fucking ...

Hey Bickazer! For me, that “something” would be music. Stylistically, I don't think it's necessary to put something in quotes, and think it will look better without the quotes. That's ...

More Scavengeeerrrrrrrr *glomp* =D The Raven grinned. His stutter was hilarious. ‘The Raven, the only hybrid out of Kiona.’ I love how she is viewed as a freak, and yet ...

*swings in on rope* Here I am to review! =D The landlord saw. He shrugged. ‘Just don’t make no trouble, and I won’t say nothing.’ The Raven blinked at him ...

Hey Spike! NOTE : Mahatma here means mahatma gandhi. To start out, I'm not sure who that person is that you are talking about so....ehh, sorry This is off-topic, but ...

Hey Spike! First, I would like to thank you for your request. In the first stanza, you have feelings that are associated with positivity, and then you end with a ...

Hey Wooster! I really enjoyed the first part, so naturally I expect super awesomeness from this part as well. Lying on her back, the Raven could see the sky burning ...

Hey Foxy Voxy. =D I sat down behind a stack of books, reading the first pages of each in my unique way. (without turning the pages, much less opening them) ...

Hey Phantom. I'm going to give you a very detailed, line-by-line, constructive review, as being a writer you are naturally awesome and I only want to help! :D The rain ...

Start crying? I wouldn't say the book is even nearly that close to be moving in that sort of way - not to say it isn't a good book. It ...