Chirantha

You know what this story reminds me of? Pirates of the Carribean 3rd movie also begins with those people going to the gallows. So,these should be fixed, She shivered in ...

Turning from bad to worse as I see it. Please,make something happen to Ivy. “Prison.” Ellima shook her head and tried to pull away from him. Put it like "Ellima ...

Aw,poor Ellima.I thought she got the better of Ivy but this certainly not what I expected. What has Ivy ever done to you?” Ellima turned away from her. Why didn't ...

A really great story,much more better than the first part. And you made that really annoying Ivy get embarrased infront of all those people,that was just what she needed.A really ...

I don't know what to say,the others had pointed out all the mistakes. But I theresay I will find some, Excruciating pain filled her body as Ellima heard these words. ...

So you say that everybody is going to die in Harry's lator life?Interesting. :D But the story does have mistakes,nevertheless, His emerald eyes sparkled with rage and a touch of ...

Are there any other words that can be equelled to the word WOW? If there are all thoes should go to your book. But there is some er...... thing that ...

I can say that you had written the story in a great hurry because you had made a lot of mistakes. Comments in bold text, My muscles tensed , I ...

Your story is way too short but a good cliff-hanger as Livinginfantasy says. But you should make these up, Toby, was an alright guy, I guess, but he was a ...

Yup,confusing is the word allright, Who is Colastor?The cubs father?Nicarga's father?Brother?Whoever he is you should describe him later. Who is Geedo?If he is a the one who is delivering the ...

your brilliant imagination will lead you to a great future :wink: Great start,your view about shape shifters is great,and your view about battles.perfect. But you had not added some of ...

I have to agree with VicternoO that it's an incredible story for a 60 years old lady. Is your character a fairy?a pixie?an angel? By your description about her I ...

I can say that you are talented in writing.Good work. :D But more over,you should have described little more of the environment and about Macy. Your mysterious character seems to ...

Your view about the "hell" is interesting.But there are some spelling mistakes that had been pointed out by others,so I won't repeat them. It's pretty short so that I can't ...

Your story is quite good but i'll have say that you should have described more about Arabelle in the ball and she falling in love with the prince.Her mother is ...