Chirantha

Hi there Stela, Well, I like the way you used this chapter to emphasize the relationship between the main character and her parents. Also, you showed the main character's own ...

Hi there Polink, Well, I'm here to review the 2nd chapter. Hopefully, I'll be able to review it before I have to sleep. Alright, this was a great chapter and ...

Hi there Stela! I'm interested in the plot of the story. It seems scary and mysterious. I like it. :D Alright, let me just jump into the review. Mistakes I ...

Hi there, I was sad to see that this chapter was so small. You could've have made it bigger and more descriptive. Mistakes It was misty and dark in my ...

Hi there DontStopBelieving, Well, what can I say, I found the first chapter interesting and I was dragged towards the seconds one ;) Alright, I'll jump into the review straight ...

Hi there Polink, A strange but unique story. I'm curious to see how the next chapters turn out. Alright, I won't say much here, so I'll go into the review, ...

Hi there, You are doing well in the emotional department, and story-wise it's getting interesting. So, without saying much, let the reviewing begin, Mistakes I couldn’t see anything, but I ...

Hi Dontstopbelieving, I'm interested in the story. Firstly, because you spent more time on the emotional development, and even though it's only the first chapter, I feel connected to the ...

Hi there, I'm impressed. You have written this chapter in an angle that mixes both the plot progress and emotional development. That's a hard thing to do, and I'm glad ...

Hi Leah, Although I'm not sure who's the character I'm following in your story, it still is pretty interesting and I like the way you mixed the dialogue with description, ...

Hi there, Well well well, the plot thickens. I'm very interested to know where this is going. *strokes imaginary beard* :D Mistakes “Were not just going to the castle, We're ...

Hi there, So, now I'm hooked to the story. Because I couldn't stay away from the 2nd chapter even though I reviewed the 1st chapter only hours ago :) Okay, ...

Hi Leah, I'm truly impressed by your writing and I have to be honest, it's far better than anything I've read in this site for a long time. Your use ...

Hi there, This story is interesting and as I do have a soft spot for fantasy story, I found this to be more interesting. Onto the review, my friend Mistakes ...

Hi there Astronaut, Well, I'm impressed. About both the story and your skillful way of using the words to describe something. Well done. But I did notice one severe fault ...