ChickenFeet

Hey Mags! This is really good - I love it! Don' listen to Layla - shes a poopface. I loved the images you wrote about in this - it was ...

Hey There! First off, this makes beautiful images in my mind :) it practically smells like summer. The feeling of the poem is aweseome, the rhythm needs a little work, ...

Hello! First off, I really like this poem I think your really going somewhere with it. You have good grammar and punctuation, but I did notice a few errors: I ...

First of all I love this prologue!!! Even though it is very strong I still have soem pointers. First, give some forshadowing about the plot. There's a little forshadowing when ...

Hey Mags I agree with the first few replyers, this is an awesome poem! However, remember to capatilize each new line. If I remember correctly they should always be capitlized ...

First of all, I love this poem. It has a very beautiful rhythm that could be turned into a song. Your first two paragraphs are probably the best: Two worlds ...

I think this is really good! It has a very smooth rythm that flows very nicely, and I think that the poem its self has a great subject that promts ...

A race of dark-skinned, brightly dressed, people joined the fray. "dressed" does not need a comma after it ------ “Aaaallrighty then,” Death slurred, when he had consumed his beverage, “Let’s ...

CHAP 4 "I-I-it’s true,” he croaked out, glancing up at the FILTH with begging eyes, “I-I saw her m-m-myself. The one they call ‘The C-c-converted Savor’ I think you mean ...

“Knew you’d come to your senses, good fellow,” he laughed, as before Ebony’s eyes age withered away and a young handsome man was left in its place. That sentance is ...