Published January 10, 2009
Will we ever stop running?
And if we do,
what will be our final destination?
where will we begin?
how will we start?
will it be fast?
or will it be cut short?
and will we ever know just what it is,
we are running from?
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I think this is really good!
It has a very smooth rythm that flows very nicely, and I think that the poem its self has a great subject that promts deeper thoughts. There are some things that need to be capatilized, or other incorrect punctuations, but I know you don't need me to point them out to you.
♥Rowie♥
Hey!
Welcome to YWS!
This was a good poem, but it was very short, so you might not get a lot of critique.
"where will we begin?" W should be capatilized.
"how will we start?" ditto ^
"will it be fast,
or will it be cut short?" Captalized, and try combining them like I did.
"and will we ever know just what it is, Ditto ^^
we are running from?" I liked this line, it was a good finale.
If you have any questions/problems, PM me. :]