ChernobyllyInclined

Whoops, looks like you got cut off in the middle there. Fix that? Anyway, I liked it. You write engagingly and even though the story is, technically, cliche, it doesn't ...

This was intriguing but too short for a whole chapter. Okay, here it is: The two guys are interesting and I like the way they talk. The way you described ...

Welcome to YWS. This was actually really interesting, and despite a few problems, I definitely liked it. Characters: Both Billy and Alexander were compelling characters, and not only because, technica

Yay! A new story. I liked it and, if nothing else, it will be good practice and you will learn something from it. Uh oh. It starts out with the ...

This was interesting. I think you have an intriguing idea you just had trouble implementing it in a grabbing way. Characters: I think we need to get to know Scarper ...

I suppose it must be because it's new - which means your writing has greatly improved in the last few little whiles - but this was terribly good. All of ...

Hmmm...this was definitely interesting. I am surprised that you have gotten only one other review - doesn't seem fair. Anyway, the characters were interesting and the description was good but ...

Why do you ask if its strange when no one is asking? Of course its painful when someone you love leaves. Everyone knows that. And so I don't think any ...

Well, I liked it. The idea at least. I would recommend not posting so much in one thread - this was quite a bit to read all at once. Perhaps ...

I like the idea. I've always found imaginary friends to be something that I cannot grow weary of. But I am fairly certain that you could have done this better. ...

Hmmm... I don't know too much about poetry but I'll try to give you a good review. This was not very original. You told alot but did not show very ...

You're twenty! It says up there. I didn't notice before. Frightfully silly. The tangling is the whole point. The style matches the story. It must be read carefully. Like Dickens ...

I liked the writing; the description was pretty and vivid. But there was no tension, not grabbing enough for a first chapter... Characters: Jason was not an interesting character. He ...

I have a feeling you will get published. I have a few technical corrections for you. But they are minor. First, at the beginning, the '3' needs to be 'three'. ...

Hmmm...this really had nothing to it. There was no description, nothing to grab the readers attention, no character development and no plot. The reader has no connection to anything thats ...