Why do you ask if its strange when no one is asking? Of course its painful when someone you love leaves. Everyone knows that. And so I don't think any of this is necessary.
Perhaps you could make this into a picture. Show the feeling. Have someone drowning or strangling themselves and someone else saying, 'It doesn't hurt. Why are you crying? It doesn't hurt at all.' That would actually be pretty awesome.
Describe everything: sparkling water, silvery bubbles, distorted faces, contemptuous laughs. The pain as all air runs out and water rushes into lungs, causing an agony only few understand. This would make your pain interesting, fantastic, and almost new even though it isn't.
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