Chelbig695

I have to complement the fact that you gave that much suspense in such a short amount of words. The way you introduce the "beast" seems a bit cliche to ...

I have to complement the fact that you gave that much suspense in such a short amount of words. The way you introduce the "beast" seems a bit cliche to ...

I enjoyed the emtional detail behind the braveness of the knight when he hears the screaming. If this is the first thing some one reads before entering the world of ...

You convey your opinion on the matter very nicely and even admit that you may be writing bias by gender. The metaphors for the loss of interest in a partner ...

The enjambment present in the first three stanzas flows nicely with the detailed metaphors. The third stanza, fourth line down, has the mispelling "trul" which I'm pretty sure is meant ...