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Hello there. So, this chapter still retains your lovely style of description, but is a little rough. I'm not one much to speak upon romantic techniques (believe me, I've tried), ...

Hello again, here's another unnecessary review: Ah, Mercy. What a complex character. And you've created her in such a short time. It's truly marvelous to behold. Not to be rude ...

Hello once more. To begin, I'm absolutely loving the characters you have here. Dr. Aiden is the kind of person you hate not just because the main character hates him, ...

Hello once more. So, a profound little peek into the mind of Mercy. It's both interesting and touching. The character and society introduced here are simply marvelous. I have little ...

The more reviews, the merrier, I suppose. You've carried over your skill of psychological punches and well-delivered dialogue to create a wonderfully intense mood. It really is astounding. There's not

You already have seventeen reviews...here, have another! I like the tone throughout this piece. It really sounds like an intelligent person is talking to themselves. The damp clothes simile was ...

It's a belated review, but whatever. Happy Review Day! Here's the first issue I noticed: word choice. Now, you do fine with verbs and nouns, but I'd really like a ...

Even your rough versions are near perfection... But anyway, hello once more. I absolutely adore your style of writing by now. It feels witty without losing the plot's intrigue, and ...

Happy Review Day! Disclaimer: I have not read the previous chapters. This chapter, as a whole, felt a little flat to me. I mean, I get that realistic fiction would ...

Happy Review Day! This was a fascinating read. James' interactions with the world are subtly astounding in depth. But as things go, my eyeballs nearly dried up and fell out ...

Happy Review Day! Disclaimer: I have not read chapter one. So, for the most part, I enjoyed reading this. Heather isn't the most terrible name to have drilled into your ...

Happy Review Day! First off, you've got some lovely imagery here. Your style of description is simply wonderful. But as was said before, it may become a bit...wordy. What I ...

Hm. Well, if there's no plot, what the blazes are you going to keep writing about? You know what, never mind. It's best I didn't know. Grammatical issues have already ...

Happy Review Day! Disclaimer: I have not read the previous chapters. Oh, I get so disappointed when I read well-written pieces. There's really not much you can say in line ...

Happy Review Day! Since there isn't much here, I'll make this brief. I have no issues with your descriptive techniques or your grammar, and I'm in no position to comment ...