Charmgirl1995
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Okay, I think that this prologue is amazing! It left me wanting to read more and more. I did not see any mistakes, which shows me you put a lot ...
Apr 19, 2011
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I really liked this! When I was reading the first few lines, I thought that this guy was just crazy and really evil, but as your piece went on, his ...
Sep 24, 2010
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Ok, I like the begining and how you compare their hair and eyes. Nice job on the peer pressure thing. But you need to tell me why they were going ...
Sep 24, 2010
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This is a letter your writing. To me, it sounds more like your writing a story. As I looked around, I noticed a look of despair on a boy's face. ...
Aug 15, 2010
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