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Re: When Two Worlds Collide - Chapter Two
Love this novel that you are writing! Chapter 1 was great and I'm so happy to be reading the second chapter. "'You should at least try to pay attention to ...
Nov 20, 2015 -
Re: When Two Worlds Collide - Chapter One
Hi! I thought that this was really good. When writing a novel you should always write things fully out "My bangs hang a little over my eyes, yet my hair ...
Nov 19, 2015 -
Re: A Meeting Of Equals.
The first paragraph is amazing. Your descriptions are on point. This sentence seems a little weird though "Dust clouded the air, as although the scene was coloured with extravagance, the ...
Nov 19, 2015 -
Re: The Side Left Behind: Prologue
This was an amazing prologue. I'm extremely curious about what happens next. The only things that I think need tinkering is your grammar and a couple of sentences were a ...
Nov 19, 2015 -
Re: Aftermath: Chapter 1 - New Beginnings
I have two questions: 1. Do you know the game Life is Strange because this is very similar to it. 2. How does someone not know what the word emo ...
Nov 19, 2015