Charliebo

I don't suggest you make this longer, but i do suggest that you make more of the first couple of lines. They're just sort of there so that the last ...

hello! Welcome to yws! Firstly, great title. I don't think that i've heard it written by anyone else before. So that's a fab start. I immediately wanted to read. However, ...

heya natanoona. That should really be changed to your actual name. This is a lovely piece. there was just enough for me to digest. Any longer, it would have ruined ...

was the person who wrote that this is plagiarism really serious, because that, my friends, is improper use of the word. For further reading see... no wait, i don't have ...

hey bexarama. How you doin my lover? I have a random suggestion that isn't necessarily connected with this piece. Have you ever written any non-rhyming poetry? It's called prose poetry ...

hey, that's great! Very Japanese. I do think that you should put fish break instead of fish breaks, but it depends; i don't know anything about haikus! I really like ...

Well, Nat, i love this poem! I think it's really very good. It's beautifully descriptive and metaphorical. Wonderful. I would point out that you said shield when you might have ...

Very philisophical, bisquit. It's obviously something that you thought about! My only critique is that maybe you could structure this into a poem. It might be quite interesting as it's ...

sounds good. you would definately have to work hard on it to make it original, because there are a lot of 'finds herself', 'love of her life' books out on ...

hello. well, i think that you've touched a nerve! But i think it's good of you to post what you believe and challenge things. People need to challenge things or ...

hello there! ok... first of all, i think that this isn't a terrible poem. I actually like it! And because of that, i reckon that it's definately worth my time ...

hi! Lol! I get it now! At first i thought that the beeping was the phone... i understand now. Well, i thought that was really good. Well written. You have ...

lol! nice one loz! This is the most demented poem that you've ever written! Lol. However, i liked it. It made me laugh (hence the lolling). I think if you ...

hello. I really like this poem, so i will give it a review although i'm afraid that i might simply repeat what other people have already mentioned. Ok... The sky ...

Hey! Very nice poem; i liked it a lot. However, there are a few minor things that are really annoying me... Sympathy is a Sin. Thick and running [s]through[/s] from ...