Chakeber

Wow, very intriguing and though provoking. The first paragraph was a bit puxxling, i head to read a couple sentences over a couple of times to get the jist of ...

Wow, you say it's a quick write so you must have talent. It's really really great. You know how you start reading something and you just want to keep eating ...

Very heartfelt, I can tell it means something to you. Most poetry means something to the writer but not often does it truly express their connection with it. The only ...

You could use more description of the setting. The weather, is it rainy (Which would correlate with her mood), or sunny and shining, warm or cold. The school,Is it smelly, ...