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Look here.

by brokenbeastxx


Look at me,

What do you see?

Am I appealing?

Do i please?

Can you see me in the past?

Or focus on me now?

Whats my future? 

Please give me humor. 

"It'll be okay"

That's what they all say.


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Sun Jun 17, 2018 7:07 am
Eros wrote a review...



Hey there, brokenbeastxx !!

This is Eros here with a review for your poem !!

The title was very catchy and that compelled me to read this. As I have read this now, I felt that I shouldn't leave without reviewing ...

It was a short sweet little piece of poetry with a deep meaning hidden inside. The words that you used perfectly suits the poem and the genre of it.

I like how you have expressed the thoughts here. The flow of the poem was also very smooth. The theme seems simple and easy are first but on re reading, I found out the actual meaning behind it. I really loved this poem of yours.

The style and the way you have written this poem is also very unique.

It written in a simple language that was easy to understand.

It was a great piece of work, and it was creative, I mean the idea was creative

I loved this poem very much.

It was an awesome work !
Great job !!
Keep writing such amazing piece of poetry and other stuffs and we would keep reading them !

Have a great day / night !!
~Eros.




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Sun Jan 10, 2016 11:18 am
kay0rys28 says...



Hiya brokenbeastxx!

I had to read your piece of literature over and over again to fully comprehend the meaning. Upon reading your poem, I was somehow able to relate to the theme of your poem. I feel that your poem is very straight forward but equally deep. Your portrayal of an actor's life which is governed according to the likes and dislikes of his/her audience, is really emotional. I really like the theme you have chosen to base your poem upon. I must say, you have chosen a very challenging topic, nonetheless you have succeeded. :)

I feel that the persona's audience have only known the persona for the many faces he/she plays on stage and not really for who he/she really is, as an individual. The lines

"Or focus on me now?
Whats my future?"

pose a rhetorical questions that really do justice to this poetic device. I personally like it because of the usage of simple words. This poetic device, to me is a very important tool as it helps the readers better relate to the poem. At this juncture, I must say, your selection of poetic devices are really good.

In my personal opinion, I think you can make your closure a bit more dramatic. Maybe add two more lines, but I still love it this way :). I feel that you can do more justice to the title of your poem. Perhaps you could give it a more dramatic and enticing tone. [It is just a suggestion]

Overall, I really loved your poem and I am expecting more poems like this from you. For a quick write I would give it a perfect ten. Keep on writing and all the best for your future.

Bye
~Kay




brokenbeastxx says...


Thank you for the suggestions I'll keep them in mind next time I write:)



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Sun Jan 10, 2016 11:18 am
kay0rys28 says...



nice poem




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Sun Jan 10, 2016 11:18 am
kay0rys28 wrote a review...



Hiya brokenbeastxx!

I had to read your piece of literature over and over again to fully comprehend the meaning. Upon reading your poem, I was somehow able to relate to the theme of your poem. I feel that your poem is very straight forward but equally deep. Your portrayal of an actor's life which is governed according to the likes and dislikes of his/her audience, is really emotional. I really like the theme you have chosen to base your poem upon. I must say, you have chosen a very challenging topic, nonetheless you have succeeded. :)

I feel that the persona's audience have only known the persona for the many faces he/she plays on stage and not really for who he/she really is, as an individual. The lines

"Or focus on me now?
Whats my future?"

pose a rhetorical questions that really do justice to this poetic device. I personally like it because of the usage of simple words. This poetic device, to me is a very important tool as it helps the readers better relate to the poem. At this juncture, I must say, your selection of poetic devices are really good.

In my personal opinion, I think you can make your closure a bit more dramatic. Maybe add two more lines, but I still love it this way :). I feel that you can do more justice to the title of your poem. Perhaps you could give it a more dramatic and enticing tone. [It is just a suggestion]

Overall, I really loved your poem and I am expecting more poems like this from you. For a quick write I would give it a perfect ten. Keep on writing and all the best for your future.

Bye
~Kay




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Wow, you say it's a quick write so you must have talent. It's really really great. You know how you start reading something and you just want to keep eating it up quickly like a piece of pie? That's how it was for me. I love the rhyming as well. It's so imminently great. It means something to so many people, and by me saying that it means i understood what you were talking about which is always good for poems. When a person can relate and understand. You don't have to thing too hard which is good. Great job, just make sure to capitalize those I's ;)




brokenbeastxx says...


Thank you!




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