CelticaNoir

Thanks Tiger! ^^ I've edited the story like you said.

Thanks for the advice! I guess I forgot about describing her looks. :D I'll fix it later.

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Thanks! ^^ I corrected all the mistakes now, should be okay to read now. :D Robyn.

It was great. :D Other than what Spitfire said, of course, it's okay, I think. You could still do some good by putting those gaps in between the paragraphs, but ...

But I already said Reena was ten years old...T_T And anyways, this was written on a sudden impulse. :P

It's Leza again. ^^ Wow, and I mean it. :P Still jarring every time I look back and forth between the posts to refresh myself, but I guess it can't ...

Hi, it's Leza. Good job, as usual. I especially liked the split personality twist. ^^ The sudden difference in writing style is a little jarring, but I suppose it couldn't ...

Hi Durrie, it's Lean again. :P Again, it was well done. The flow of the story is smooth, and there aren't any grammar mistakes as far as I can see. ...

Thanks Peanut! ^^ It helped, and I'll keep it in mind the next time I write a poem.