Catalyst

Thanks for reviewing! I really do apologise for the name Warren springing up here, I wrote it in instead of Ford out of habit, as Warren is a character in ...

Hey there, thanks for the review! I didn't really intend for Baelrom or Daemon to be loathsomely pompous, just to have their ignorance of lower classes and their upbringing be ...

Oh, I simply meant that despite the fact that the description in this piece is a little weak, that doesn't really matter in a chapter that mostly focuses on the ...

Whoops! Got my characters confused and mistyped Ford as Warren, a character from another story. I know the the ending was quite abrupt, mainly from me stubbornly attempting to stop ...

Hey there! Thank-you very much for the review! Firstly, I have to say I do agree more with MadWriter on the whole "personality" thing, although I will say that, seeing ...

Hey there! Thank-you very much for a review. You make some very good points about characterization and plot, so I'd just like to address a few of your points. Firstly, ...

No problem! If you have the time, I'd really appreciate it if you checked out my latest story, you can find it in the green room, "Dance of the Midnight ...

Hey there, thanks for the review, I'll try remedy that apostrophe issue in the future (as dialogue grammar seems to be my biggest problem :D) So yeah, definitely some good ...

Hey there, thanks for the review! I'll keep in mind that tip about italics, I wasn't completely sure, so I threw in the quotes to be safe. As for it ...

Hey there, thank-you very much for the review! It was really helpful, I'm glad you liked the story. The point about the "barrage of questions" is very valid, and it's ...

Hey, thanks for the review! I might work on some longer paragraphs (although more dialogue and thoughts is really what I'm focussing on right now). In terms of walking around ...

Hey there, thank-you for the review! Hah, yes, the theme is a little on the BloodBorne side, and that'll become far more apparent in the next chapter, where I'll be ...

Hey, thanks for taking your time to review, Overall, the points are pretty good, I'll try stay away from the run-on sentences. That personal thing is something to not as ...

Thank you very much for the review! As an afterthought, and after looking at other manuscripts on the site, I suppose this chapter isn't too long. Chapter 2 will be ...

No problem, I'll post my thoughts a little later. Until then, would you mind checking out a work of my own? It's chapter 1 of my new novel, I'd appreciate ...