CastlesInTheSky

this one's just one of my dinky stories. it's not too great, but i'm just putting it out there. enjoy. :] I will :D. But , by the way, just ...

So maybe it doesn't seem like fantasy right now, but trust me, it will be. Although, the completion of this story is not guaranteed, so proceed with caution. Please critique ...

My first story posted on a forum...anywhere. Let me know thoughts, comments, etc. And let me know if you'd like more, or if the topic is dull. (: Thanks! ______________________________________________

Hello, Bittersweet. I know you hate the "OMG that's soo good" reviews, but this was really, really good. There was some beautiful use of imagery and your description is spot ...

Math hours could bring you at the brink of insanity!!! Refrain from using exclamation marks at the ends of your sentences, it takes maturity away from one's work. Rephrasal of ...

Wow, Snoink. This was actually hilarious. Where do you get it from? Your talent to write and be able to make people laugh? Favourite lines: Sometimes, if I want to ...

Hey, Bittersweet :D I've been reading your amazing story all the way through and have found no major flaws with the plot so far. Might I go to add that ...

Sophia stood there, bemused and bewildered. All she was thinking about was James and what he just told her. How can this be possible? I thought... Unintentional alliteration there - ...

Chapter Eleven “So, who’s Sebastian?” I asked, forgetting that little detail. [b](Authors note: Thanks Merry!!!) I had sat back on the bed, but across from Jasper. I couldn’t be near ...

Chapter Ten For the next few weeks, I went back and forth between Jasper and Damien. Jasper really did want this, even though he would become a monster. He kept ...

Haley sat at the top of the stairs clutching her empty glass. You need to insert a comma (,) after "clutching." It would have to be the usual creeping routine, ...

There were people everywhere. Ladies dressed in their finest white cotton muslins. With intricate patterns and stripes. The last two sentences need to be made into one sentence. Hence, "Ladies ...

Chapter Nine I refused Cameron’s hand, even in my dream, that night. Like in real life, he was furious with me. He took my arm anyway. He pulled me along ...

~Hey, I'm back with part two. After finally doing some homwork, I finally finished this part. Yeah! :D So, I hope you all enjoy and like.~ Of course I will ...

[b]Hi, This is fourth try for the beginnig of Lake Girls. This one is defiantly my favorite. I have done a lot of tweeking, so please tell me if there ...