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It was good but In the beginning you said her name was Cnthia, not Livia. And now you're calling her Livia?????? It confused me, but it was pretty good from ...

Talk about confusing! It was good but first you said her dad had bright blue eyes. Jossette hated how here fathers bright blue eyes seemed to be glazing and his ...

i liked it, i think it should be longer though. So if you don't mind you should add a little more to it and maybe even describe your characters more ...

i loved it. i like how you showed how angry she was that her parents had done that to her. your scenery sounds beautiful, i wish i could go there!! ...

i liked it. It was pretty good, but like the others said, you should change the title. I don't like the original title right now. SORRY! But other than that ...

OK I don't get it. I sthe whole scene with her boyfriend a flash back or what? And you jump around to much. What happened to her? How did she ...

nice work. I kinda liked the first chapter better than this one. I liked how it was Crickets point of view, not Austins. I think you need to describe Austin ...

I think jayleighsmith got to it, but she's write. Where was she before? You need to give the chapter more depth and again, make it longer. you jumped to the ...

WOW! This was really good, but you need to add a little more to the chapter. You don't have to but that's just my opinion. I really liked it. You ...

I liked it but you definatly need to make another chapter. Soon. I like how you tell the pain it gives rose and how she keeps reminding herself she is ...

I liked all of the feeling you put into it. For example, { I must keep these images with me as we are, oceans apart} You used great word choice, ...

I liked it, I think the others already got to it, but you did a really great job. You should become a professional author. I'm sorry I'm not very good ...

None of it made sense. Why would two girls call eachother babe and honey? You REALLY neesd to rewrite it, OK? And I don't get how it says: (My friends ...

I think you ended it to soon. But you should definitely write more. But other than that I liked it and I think that if you wanted to be an ...

AWWWW!! Why did you remove it? I wanted to read it really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really ...