CarsonTheArson

I like it. You start off strong and I love the language and tone you use. The story so far is interesting, and I like how the thieves base, or ...

Thanks Angel! I was trying to go for that classic English style, and I guess I did okay on that. And now that you talk about repeating words, I see ...

Thank you! I do agree about paragraph spacing. This was actually a school project and I was pressed for space, but I plan to go back and work on it ...

Told you I would come back to the beginning! Well, I like it! It does move along pretty fast though. I have that same problem. I seem to speed things ...

Thank you so much! I was inspired by a dream and I thought it could become a good story. I did have some trouble writing the ending but I'm glad ...