Cariad

I like it. Well, I can't say I like it, but I like how it's written, and with the suggestions of others it would be very heartrending, or at least ...

Interesting. I couldn't find that many grammatical errors in this, though someone with more experience than me might do better. There were a few parts that seemed choppy, not that ...

Very interesting. I've never seen the elements used in this way before, I'm kinda jealous that it's yours. Very good, it could use some more polishing, perhaps a bit of ...

By request, here's my critique. I love the topic. Based on all that is going on in the Middle East, Russia seemed to come out of nowhere. The characters seemed ...

There's not much left I can correct that the posts before me haven't already said. I'd like to see more, sounds as if you have a good romance going. Fencing, ...