Calibur

okay guys thanks.

Thanks you guys very much for the advice I've been looking for a site to help teach me how to write better but no luck yet do you know of ...

I understand what you mean but i'm just now starting to write stories so i'm not going to be as good as everybody here but if you did continue to ...

I agree if she wants to give her characters weapons let her give her characters weapons.

The storyline is very interesting and detailed everyone has handled the advice that needs to be given so i won't bother to.