Caerulean

Hey, Pink! Don't lose interest. :) That can cause you to write unenthusiastically or run out of ideas just like what happened with my other story that I was writing ...

First! :D xD Nitpicks: As I rested my cheek against Luke’s hard chest I wanted so bad just to disappear. - Put a comma after 'chest'. Once we returned home ...

Hey, Pink :D. Here I am again... Nitpicks: He never told me or her but I could tell you know? - Put a comma before between 'tell' and 'you'. brother's ...

Nitpicks! I had fought, I had tried my best and I made countless mistakes but now, I was out of breath. - I think you can/should put a period after ...

Hey there, Pink! :D Awesome chapter! Nitpicks: She let out breath and walked up to me. - Should be: She let out a breath and walked up to me. I ...

Nitpicks! xD I actually had some fun doing these nitpicks haha :D. don’t get too work up, sweetheart.” I guess this should be: don't get too worked up, sweetheart." would ...

Hey! :) Thanks for sending me a message! Ooh, I'm the first one to review! XD She knew exactly how irritate me better than anyone else. - Should be: She ...

Hi, Pink! XD Okay, so here I go: The beginning seemed a bit hurried. It kinda reminded me of the very first paragraphs I used as an introduction for the ...

This review is quite hurried 'cause it's nearly midnight here! XD Anyway, I skimmed the reviews and I think the parts I'm going to nit-pick weren't commented on yet. Anyway, ...

Darn. My problem with making a review is that I forget the parts in the story which I have to quote but since I can't find them again, I'll just ...

The other reviewers already commented on the 'mistakes' part so all I'm gonna say is that I can't connect the first chapter to this chapter. It was like a totally ...

Hi, Solvalery! I read this chapter as you requested. I also skimmed the previous reviews quickly and, as far as I've read, they're right. Anyway, I don't really like quoting ...

Okay. The only problems left is that you didn't use commas on some parts of the story and that you didn't put spaces in between some parts too. (xD) "Exhausted ...

Ooh! This is really inspirational (xD)! I noticed one thing though: "Voices of kids out walking dogs". I didn't get that part. Did you make a mistake or something? Anyway, ...

This is a fine story but you have a couple of minor grammatical errors and I'm gonna mention a few of them even though you said that you don't care ...