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You have gotten many elements of poetry right, my dear, but yes, this is a really good example of focused description of one unconventional object. *bows*

How is the title confusing? It's a duck! That's what makes this poem cool. It's centered around a duck, with all these gorgeous descriptions...yay for unique poetry that's NOT about ...

^^What she said. Thank you, Sophie, for being articulate. Definitely try writing about something small and *seemingly* unimportant; that type of exercise can produce some unique results.

Yay! Bye-bye second stanza. Now it's kind of short and sweet. Short and sour, rather. Nice. I'm really pleased there was a snowday today. I didn't have to go to ...

I suppose anyone who's passionate about his work will get caught up in it, lion-trainer or not.

Well actually if you MUST know, I editted ambition because I realized that lack of puncuation just kind of ruins everything. Haha. Hey you learn something new every day. *high-five* ...

The end says that even if you have a path laid out for yourself, and all the necessary things to take, you are going nowhere if you have no destination. ...

*throttles Elizabeth* Why do you keep me guessing?! Mwahaha, I likes it with all its shiver-inducing creepiness. Another question: What is the significance of his occupation: artisan?

You punctuated "Ambition" in Dramatic Poetry. I liked that one. This piece does have punctuation. Six commas, one question mark, one hyphen, and four quotation marks, so yes, you have ...

The point behind the meaning...what? That people are shallow? If you're intending that we get something else, then it seems this poem has failed to get it across. And isn't ...

I suppose cables might bring up the image of machinery, something stripped down to its barest naked parts. Still, that whole stanza is just full of cluttered metaphors, so I ...

We have Nathaniel Hawthorne to be obscure, and while dodgey terms have their place in the world, a simple affirmation, clear-cut, can also have its value. Obscure and subtle are ...

One more thing, you don't use rare adjectives in poems. It ruins it and confuses the reader. Was that a reference to "emo"? I didn't think there were any rare ...

The words "man" and "again" are similar enough for the rhyme to work. ^_^ I'm all for slant rhyme, but those two seemed a little too far apart. I'll think ...

I hate the title too. Unfortunately, "Teacher in the Snow" makes me think of this poem that my friend wrote about a chorus song with violins in the snow... The ...