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What precisely was the prompt for this? I guess my main complaint is that it's just a list of facts, but then, I don't know what your teacher's looking for, ...

Hello there, Angel, and welcome to YWS. 1) I edited your title so that it's not in all caps. That's a looks annoying and discourages people from reviewing your work. ...

The Other Boleyn Girl by Philippa Gregory. I'm serious. Worst thing I've ever read. I got it for Christmas. I don't like memoirs, for the most part, which is probably ...

SUZANNE! Hi. You are a book with too many words in a language of spectral letters, but if I close my eyes, I see: read with me, read with me. ...

Oh, and my big red EMO stamp had gone unused for so long! *stamps* Yes, unfortunately I find the poem rather "emo" and bland. Why, tell me, should I as ...

Oh, I do have a thing for love poetry, I do. I identify two main problems in what is otherwise a strong poem: 1) It's too prosaic. To be fair, ...

Hi there Jared! Hmm. I think, first of all, that the poem hasn't quite done its job in creeping me out...I'm guessing that's the effect you were going for, but ...

Hi ArmedToTheHorns! I see that you have 3 posts, but no reviews under your belt! I'd like to remind you that at YWS we request that you critique at least ...

To use a famous quote by T.S. Eliot: Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality, but an ...

You might not want to post so much next time! My main complaint is that your characters are really boring. You've got my attention with the weird girl and everything, ...

I loved the poem at the beginning, but from then it went slightly downhill. Not all the way down the hill, you know, and the hill has a very shallow ...

Overall, I finish reading this poem and wonder, "So what?" It's mostly description, and while the description is decent, I should like for it to go somewhere, know what I ...

I like it, but as always, I complain that it is too wordy and complicated. Here is how I would rephrase to make stuff flow better or sound less wordy. ...

Hey Minniax! My first piece of advice would be to not post all your poems in one thread. Post them separately, but of course not all on one day. That ...

I agree with Mesh in that the poem is rather...vague...and as much as I think that's part of its charm, I feel that it needs to be more firmly grounded ...