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' when i turned fifteen'. You need to capitalize the "i" in this sentence since this is supposed to be proper. ' The two rushed back through the, milky white, ...

'The moon, oh that beautiful moon. It shine so brightly threw my curtains.' ' my voice died before I can scream,'. These were the few things that I found wrong ...

'for all Sages were woman as surely as Knights were men'. This part of the sentence was the only thing wrong that I found in this piece. I loved the ...

'I've been in the Gardaí fortwelve years'. '"Do we know anyting that connects the victims?" asked Stanley.' '"You don't know? They where both together with a baby on the way."' ...

This was really interesting. I don't think that I've read a book, besides jack and the bean stock, that involved giants. This was really intriguing and interesting to me. I'm ...

'The boys all gasp and suck in a breath. “She ha a sharp tongue, she does,” one comments.' In this sentence all you're missing is the 's' in has. That ...

'both live I will fulfill you desire.' ' son her image left '. 'Three woman came '. ' she asked be questions '. The phrases with single quotation marks are ...

I like that you've kept going with this story. It's really cool and I'm glad that I got to read it. It really surprised me when I found out that ...

This is amazingly beautiful. Your characters give off completely believable emotions and I can totally feel what they are feeling. It is beautiful, how you described the morning with them. ...

This was amazing, you could totally imagine the pain that this man had felt as he grew up. You could totally experience what he felt as he grew up and ...

This is a great idea, it's to ba that you didn't take it any further. Your main character is well developed and the characters that interact with him are well ...

This is very good and I'm so glad that you kept going with this idea. There weren't any mistakes I could find. You have developed your main character very well ...

I could completely feel the pain of what Willow is feeling. I could feel my heart tearing just like hers was and it almost made me cry reading it. It ...

This is still the most interesting story that I want to read the ending to. I am so glad that you have kept this idea going. Your characters have developed ...

You did a really good job with this story. I'm surprised that it wa the first thing that you have written. I like how you make the main character talk ...