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Re: My darkness
Alright Phebe this was an improvement but there is always room to even better improve it. Quote: Your blood is my drink; Your eyes are my future; Your body is ...
Feb 10, 2008 -
Re: The name of the game- Chapter One
Thank you everyone for all the amazing and helpful crtics. My second chapter will be posted by Friday the 15th of February. Once again thank you for all the helpful ...
Feb 10, 2008 -
Re: The name of the game- Chapter One
THANK YOU for all the critics, I have edited it multiple times now but this is the last draft(I hope) Let me know if I'm ready to move on. -BroadwayGirl
Feb 1, 2008 -
Re: Alone
sorry i was having trouble with my computer so i posted the same comment four times. SORRY!!!!!! -BroadwayGirl
Jan 2, 2008 -
Re: Alone
This was generally a good poem First you could start by describing the actions in more detail as at the end i was left kind of confused: did she leave, ...
Jan 2, 2008 -
Re: Alone
This was generally a good poem First you could start by describing the actions in more detail as at the end i was left kind of confused: did she leave, ...
Jan 2, 2008 -
Re: Alone
This was generally a good poem First you could start by describing the actions in more detail as at the end i was left kind of confused: did she leave, ...
Jan 2, 2008 -
Re: selfishness in shell fetishes
hey KimberlyKat awesome writing I'm sorry I don't have any constructive critisism for you!!!! It was that great!!! Keep up the writing...PLEASE. -BroadwayGirl
Dec 27, 2007