BrittleBird

Wow, thank you so much! Yeah, others have mentioned punctuation would be nice, so I will probably add it.

Thank you for this! I appreciate you taking time for such a detailed review. I did add much more punctuation and separate stanzas, though some of the words you changed ...

Thank you

Thank you for your insight. Where else do you think extra lines would be good? Is it just that I am jumping from one point to the next too fast?

Thank you, this review was incredibly helpful! I didn't know center poems were more of an amateur thing... and yes, I agree with the clown line, couldn't seem to find ...

Yes I know, It's so frustrating, haha.

I really love this! Artfully penned and so full of meaning...great work!

Thank you so much! That seems to be the popular part :)

Thank you for your kind words! :)

Yeah, I chose not to use punctuation because it felt that it gave this poem too much structure and less flow than otherwise. Thank you for the nice welcome and ...

Thank you so much, your insight means a lot to me! I actually do have this problem most of the time, only with spoken word rather than writing :P I'm ...