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Re: Watching The Sky Burn: Prologue
This reminds me of the movie "The book of eli" with Denzil (?) Washington. I thought this was pretty nice, although somehow, in some strange, inconceivable way, I felt that ...
Aug 14, 2010 -
Re: Fire Girl Chapter 1
I agree with Dragonet. That wasn't long at all! I breezed through it in four minutes :D I loved it. I sounded casual, and the conversations weren't at all forced. ...
Aug 14, 2010 -
Re: Wicked Deception: Evan
That's a great story. I'd love for something after this. Even though, usually, I'm not a fan for the stories just talking about ordinary life, but this one is pretty ...
Aug 13, 2010 -
Re: Conversation
Maybe I'm a bit critical even though I just joined YWS, but I guess it's just the truth. Besides, you told us to take it apart. The "I'm late" part ...
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Words Will Always Hurt You
That's pretty strong... and I completely agree. I couldn't find any errors to pick out, probably because there was none. :D And I really liked the setting and the POV ...
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Urban Factory Ch. 1
I like it! But to give some criticism, the part where you said "He had done this because The Finisher was curious as to how the festers made such an ...
Jul 31, 2010 -
Re: Removed
I loved your story, and I love the conflict, emotions, and the pain at the end, especially the way you described the death. However, maybe your story was a little ...
Jul 20, 2010
