Boogie97

i really liked this poem. It was short, funny, and not totally expected. It made me laugh.

So it was really good but just in the last paragraph you repetitivley say it and her. Just fix that or the reader will get boring.

this is really good. I think you should clarify what happened to Johanna though.

this is really good. The only thing i was confused about was, is there two people or just one? i noticed that because you had two diffrent styles of text.

well, I liked how you linked the emotion all the way through rather than just having 1 emotional part out of it all. Really good:) keep it up.

this made me cry. the second stanza made me think of him so much:( Well your a good writer and you got a reader to cry. Not a bad sign:)

it said above the *bang* part that he held it up to his left temple which is his head, and the mom did drugs so i was trying to tie ...

I can see ghosts, she says, every other week-end, paragraph you mispelled rythem. Although I couldn't quit understand everything. You should make it more clear but otherwise it was pretty ...

pretty good. :)

this story was pretty good, except simple spelling errors. Just read it aloud and youll hear all the words mispelled. simple:)

well the last conversation dialog, i didnt no what bloke was. Other than that i absolutely loved this piece of work. Keep writing:)

i think it needs more depth. like get a little more into the the emotional side, but other than that it is very good. i dont often like poetry but ...

This was really good. like the others i cant wait to hear about more colors!

thanks! Will be sure to edit. I will also work on clarity and reading it aloud. :)

A LOT of meaning like sudichka said but i felt really calm and peacefull while reading this piece. Really good depth. loved it.