Boni_Bee

Ummm....I think you need to do a bit of research on this era, so you can understand the story better :wink: lol.... The Cat o' nine tails was most commonly ...

Thanks Niobe....but I don't quite agree with your suggestions.... I know a lot about the transportation and convict era, and the smallest term for anyone was 5 years, and the ...

Thanks Niobe :) I fixed it up.... I really appreciate everyones critiques and comments, as its helping me to continue writing this :D

I don't think this was overly cliche, and I liked how it flowed pretty well...good job

This was interesting, except the verse about the 'leafblower', it was too hard to read easily.... I don't want to read this again or I'll find myself repeating it..... 'rake ...

The salt is to heal the wounds and was much used.... Yeah, I think I'll put in somewhere that she had been dobbed in by someone Its in the 1800's...when ...

Chapter 4 Chapter 3 Chapters 1-2 Prologue

Thanks, Carmina :D Yeah, if you read the other chapters you'll get more of an idea about the story. Its just that I wanted her to get whipped a bit, ...

When are you going to post more???? 8) Please post more soon!!! :D

Thanks, Jojo :D I was only 10 at the time this story happend (but I only wrote it this year) so I don't think I could take him out to ...

Lol Snoink!!! :P The 'random periods' I explained at the top of the page :wink: On the convict ships, they didn't starve them on purpose (they all starved together basically) ...

Thanks Brian :D I had to spell it like that, because the computer takes the word out if I don't... :? I made a post about this in the 'lounge', ...

When Zachary pulled away his crocked smile hung on his face, Emily felt so connected to him in that second, nothing could dampen her mood, in just one period she ...

Thanks, TBR :D

well, I already did.... :? :oops: Well, you can either move this whole post there, or just leave it....???? hmmmm