Boni_Bee

Thanks Nefer! :)

Thanks, Nefer!!! Sometimes my computer takes out words, or parts of words, and I don't realise that until someone mentions it :? :roll: I'll fix up my story as soon ...

thanks for letting me know about the A, Mesh :)

^ditto. It was a good poem, but yeah, too forced, and because some of it was rymed and the rest didn't it was hard to read.

Interesting....! The masks were very unique, and it made sense with the story. Good Job

Good chapter :) I like it better than the others, as it shows more of his personality. Good job

I liked this, it had a sad, forlorn feel to it. I think 'the fisherman and his daughter' was repeated a bit much, but apart from that it was great! ...

they were good! :D I like the first one, it's funny.

LOL, this was hilarious!!! I liked it, and it had a good twist of humor. :P

Thanks, areida :) It did clear it up. I didn't mean she went from being young in the prologue, to the chapter one, I mean't she seemed older in the ...

Oh, ok....could you link the prologue to this chapter then? I'll read it :)

It was good, but you went from telling about the book, to the TV shows, and then back to the book. The description of the TV shows was too long, ...

that was...freaky!!! :?

This was not as good as the other chapters. Even though you tried to make it mysterious with the book, it didn't have the right effect. 'Taken aback by the ...

The second verse was too wordy, and it didn't ryme. Apart from that, it was pretty good.