BondGirl007

Now the biggest issue I have with this story is that so far, it's all kind of boring. There's barely any conflict at all, and I don't even really know ...

Hi there Jess! I hope you're enjoying YWS so far :D, I'm very glad you asked me to review this, sorry it took so long! I wonder how much time ...

Ross, I loved this, really beautiful. The one thing that bugged me was the end stanza, it got a little preachy and I was kind of disappointed with the last ...

Hi there! So just a quick suggestion, you might want to put a line in between each dialogue line. It makes it so much easier to read because you can ...

Hiya there! I haven't read any of the other chapters, but what really stood out to me in this was Peter's character. He seemed very childish, and for the first ...

Okay well first off the title I think you meant to say "Not Much To Lose." Spelling lose like loose bugs the heck outta me, and it's something that happens ...

I noticed that this only had one review! I must change that!! I haven't read the other chapters, so I'm just going to give a general review. “What the heck?! ...

Alright, well I don't know if this is some kind of joke or something, but I'm just going to give it to you straight. You need to step it up. ...

The morning sun peaked through the dusted window and ripped at my exposed head above the stained dark blue blanket. A radiant block of light below my lethargic sight leaking ...

Well this caught my eye so I decided to look through it, and review. But I honestly think this belongs elsewhere, it's seems to me, it's a short story, not ...

I agree with Amy, she gives good advice, and is in general a very awesome person, so listen to her :D. Also I just wanted to say that I did ...

Okay so the biggest thing with the poem, is that I don't feel any kind of emotions while reading it. It just doesn't have anything that catches my eye, or ...

Well good to see you posting again! Now the biggest thing I've noticed is that you have the characters using kind of a fluffy, sort of 1930's sort of language. ...

Hi there! I'm Hope, and the title of this poem caught my eye ;). Now it's really really short, only one stanza long. I suggest you add to it, it ...

Yay Zanne! You have done something I never thought possible, wrote a rhyming love poem, and have it work. Not only did it work, I really liked it. Your lips ...