BloodSunset

This story definetly intrigues me, now for the review you asked for. You say the main characters name is Ashara, I think that his name should be stated at the ...

This poem is fairly good. It's short but gets the feeling across. The rythm wasn't to bad and as one person said, removing and can make it a lot more ...

This poem is short, but really reaches out and makes sense. I actually feel like this poem connects with me. These two lines: Well, if you really know me, you'd ...

I found this poem did reflect fear very well, but it also portrayed some type of abuse. It's short, and as others have said it would be good to expand ...

I agree, it could use a little more imagery but then again this is a statement the girl is making into a tape recorder, but it would be nice if ...

I like this story, there are a couple mistakes with grammar use such as... Okay, after I took a shower, I collapsed. I was tired since I’d just run for ...

Alright, I noticed something that bothered me a bit. In a few sentences you use a word to many times, maybe find a word that could replace it yet means ...