BlondieMissyAngel

Chapter 6: Sorocs Title sweetie. we know this already Viewpoint: Emeth Rather take this out and write "Emeth:" I wasn't exactly happy about trekking across the football field to the ...

The shop that I was to work in over the next few weeks was a terraced building. The view from outside the large, dusty black window had been blocked off ...

The shop that I was to work in over the next few weeks was a terraced building. what size? The view from outside the large, dusty black window had been ...

“I will answer your questions in time,” he said through a scratched throat, “For now, join me. Look.” At first, I timidly refused, muttering something about the view being fine ...

Uhm why in the world did you put 3 chapters in one post? Try next time giving each chapter it's own post. If you don't have enough points to do ...

I stared in despair at the calendar I held. Three pages were filled with thirty to thirty-one red x’s. I flipped the now full page up and stuck the tack ...

You don't need to start off by saying "Chapter Three. We all already know what chapter it is because of the title. "A Tale of Two Drakes-Chapter 3" My magic ...

My calm was lost. I wanted to scream, to run. I struggled, but the hands that held me we’re too strong. We marched forward. I could feel soft, uneven ground ...

She would come. He knew she would. The gleaming violet-flecked green eyes would appear from the stairway. They would see through him like they had in the portrait in the ...

SO the red lines are my favorite and the blue ones are ones I'm not too sure about. Scars we don't want to stitch~ He seemed, older. More worn out ...

Dexter felt a light tap on his cheek. Something then came upon his side, moving his body back and fourth. His hibernation did not break suddenly and he stretched his ...

Hey sweetie! Well done on this peice! I really felt like I was Casey. There were however a few minor errors in the text but they were all simple things ...

YAY!! The next chapter! This is so exciting to me!! Here we go again! Madison I don't know why but when I woke up this morning, I felt lonely when ...

Hey there! I loved how you wrote this! Well done. Here are the few things that I would have changed. "I think it's time for me to go," I said. ...

Hey there! I really enjoyed reading this! here are a few flaws, i hope you don't mind I just don’t really understand. I try to add all the bits up ...