Blinkasy

Great start and I would say I loved it, but I think that understatement has already been repeated too many times. The scene of death being nothing, but a black ...

I enjoyed this, it kept me hooked. Lots of people have critiqued this already and I'm not going to try and improve on that. Short piece so this is going ...

Ok, i'm gonna try and keep this short. Blue is for commenting, red for corrections. Studious children Do you mean children who like to study? Sounds a bit fussy and ...

My faces quickly turns from a slightly tanned peach to a sickening pale white. Should be face. Worst of all my hazel green eyes burn into a fiery red..........I am ...

OK i know there has been a lot of work already done on helping you and it is all great to see reviewers. This is just a quickie of a ...