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If you read the prologue I have posted, it reveals a bit more information that will probably be very helpful to you, and also reveals the name of her betrothed. ...

Hmm... good point about the timing with the diary! She's not going to be writing in it every day, since not all that much really happens out there when she's ...

Thanks for reviewing! I know I have a lot of work to do on this chapter. The diary style of writing is fairly new to me so I'm still kind ...

thanks for the review!! I'm still experimenting with the writing style of this chapter. The prologue I have posted is the style most of the novel will be in, but ...

yes, yes, thank you! :D

ahh, I did not know that about shakey! And thanks! I appreciate it :D

ditto to all of this ^^

okay, the gods thing makes much more sense for the "should" situation now! I definitely felt the ethereal/godly/philosophical vibe going on there, but wasn't sure if it was actually supposed ...

Me again :) Question: is the first paragraph meant to be mocking the "great laws" that were written? Your use of the word "pretentiously" almost makes me think so. If ...

yay! helpful information! lol. i think i'm going to keep the opening sentence as is; i personally feel like it's kind of attention-grabbing. whether or not that's actually true, well... ...

Thank you for the review! I really appreciate it! Concerning the Darren/Grant/Wolfria arrangement, interesting thought. You'll just have to keep reading to find out :)

thank you! I've rewritten this prologue so many times I've lost count and it started to get to the point where I wasn't sure if I even liked it anymore. ...