BlackStallion

First I'll give you the bad. "I feel chocked. Unable to breathe." maybe instead of using the full stop you could have written it like this: "I feel chocked, Unable ...

First this is really, really disturbing. I mean where did you get the idea from ? I had to take a minute a two to become normal! If that was ...

I like the whole poem on a whole but it was not as fluid as most poems I've read and one another thing why have you left a line after ...